Wednesday, June 26, 2013

Show Day 4

I used Grammarly as a grammar check for today's post, because I hate proofreading. Besides, Grammarly had it done in the time it took Beth to eat an Oreo ;).

If you want to know more about show days, you can find it here. Geez, it's hard to believe I started this six week series in March and still haven't managed to finish it. Sorry, guys.

So we've made it through the first 3 weeks of "Show Days," where I attempted to write characters in a situation they wouldn't typically be in and let you guess the scenario. Now we're looking at books that do "showing" right. Today's section is from my friend and former teacher Nova Ren Summa's Imaginary Girls.

Excerpt
"We had no idea--this was before the blue-flashing strobe through the pines; the spotlit glare on water; the skidding over rocks; the grabbing of shoes, any shoes, of clothes, any clothes. Before we went running through the brush and the sharp sticks cut out feet. Before the heart in my chest went pounding, all while wondering, Is this really happening? when it was, most definitely it was. Before all that--all we wanted to do was go swimming."

Aside from being a powerful use of language, it also clearly paints a picture of teens running from the cops.  A less talented writer might have said, "This was before the cops showed up and we went running through the woods."

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